I used a Hero M2016 fountain pen with Waterman Black Ink on Moleskine lined paper.

Feedback is appreciated.

Before I give my opinion I want to ask, is there anything in particular you want to achieve with your writing?

That is not bad, may I ask how long you have been writing like that?
I would say that many of your letter forms are nice and traditional though some may be difficult to recognise in text. Of your lower case letters I find your b needs to curve up and round towards the stem otherwise it looks like an l. I recommend that with your f you extend the descender loop and where it meets the stem again make it double back behind the stem just so that it can be seen to be a crossed f.
Of your upper-case letters I quite like your S, G and L. Your I and Q seem a little ambiguous. I feel that your U might need to be a little more rounded, your V, W, X, Y and Z seem very nice.
The word 'Hero' seems ambiguous as your crossbar on the H does not meet the first stem. On the word Moleskin I find the k you have written a little confusing.
I would recommend frequent practice to improve your lines though, they seem jagged in places for example letters b, m, v, A, M and N. Your o, l, n, s, t, u, x, y and z seem nice.
To address ambiguous letter forms I would recommend browsing the many resources on, and linked to, in this forum.

Well, your handwriting in clearly legible, which puts you ahead of a lot of my friends.

Your letter widths seem very consistent, which is good. Same with the spacing of the parts of your letters, like the humps in your m's.

I think that your hand would seem more flowing and relaxed with longer descenders. Your big, round letter bodies kind of dwarf the stubby tales or p, q, etc.

Other than that there is just some shakiness on your long strokes, like the loop on your capital I, the body of A, that sort of thing. Relaxation and practice will help with that.

Your writing is legible - very easy to read. To improve the appearance you might want to work on having a more consistent slant (or lack of slant). Some of your letters are straight up and down with no slant and some are slanted slightly to the right. This is a problem I've had to work on. When I realized that the inconsistency in my writing bothered me, I first of all had to decide what degree of slant I wanted. Then I drew vertical lines with that degree of slant on my practice paper. After a few weeks of practice, I didn't need the vertical lines anymore. Most of all - relax, be patient, and enjoy practicing your penmanship.

Judybug

It's alright...I had a little bit of trouble reading it...but it is readable, which is the most important thing.

Hi,

Your writing is quite legible. You may want to note the following though:

- the Capital "I" actually might get confused with the small "L" in a writing;
- Capital G is a little confusing. You might want to drop the descender a little more to make it clearer.
- Shaky-ness: Just relax and let the lines flow (you might want to work on the drills suggested in various threads on this forum); Your small letters look a lot more relaxed than the Caps. I particularly love the small i, j, s and t
- Proportion between the upper and the lower portion of the capital letters E, K, and maybe Z, as well as the small "q";

I like the little loop at the beginning of (most of the) Capitals. Like a unique "flourish".

Have you based your writing on Business Writing like that of the Palmer method? Some of your letters look very similar:

http://www.iampeth.com/books/palmer_method...935_page95.html

Here are two files that I find very helpful. They really show the order and direction of strokes to get the optimal letter formation:

Gurkel, your handwriting is more legible than mine was a year ago. I recommend a good writing guide such as "Write Now" or some of the many letter guides offered by other members, in the pinned area of this forum or found by an on-line search. Once you decide how you want your writing to look start practicing. I love to practice my writing while the TV is on or listening to the radio. Before long, you will be more and more pleased with your results. You have a good foundation to build on. /Craig

Here's a second attempt at penmanship. Forgive the brown ink blob

More feedback is appreciated.

How about feedback regarding the feedback for you?

Your second attempt looks pretty good to me. To be honest, without knowing where you started and where you want to go, it is hard to be of much further help. For instance, if you are a youngster and are learning penmanship for the first time, it would be one thing. An older person who may have some physical challenges such as arthritis may evoke a different set of responses. What do you want to accomplish? /Craig

Only comments I would make is that the writing looks a little 'stiff' as if you're trying a bit too hard.... also more specifically the Upper Case I in Ink would be clearer if you joined to the next letter using the little 'boat' connector. Looks to me as if you start the letter from the wrong place? I think the American form of upper case I should commence from the base line on the right hand side of the letter. I reckon you will then instinctively connect to the next letter from the 'boat'.

Gurkel, go to Pendemonium (www.pendemonium.com, under "reference books") and order this book: "Business Writing: Book One - At Home with Artistic Penwork" by Stephen Ziller. It is only 6 bucks and it will help you greatly. You'll like the results, and you'll have fun using your inks and pens.

Do it today.

Good luck,
Don

formation of letters is rather good, although i find G and Q a little hard to distinguish, if they were on a page by themselves i would have trouble working them out.
it also seems rather.. 'forced' to me. try and get the letters to flow a bit more, as if they are following a letter before, and preceeding a letter after.