edited for poem removal - thanks!

That was nice...

Ah! It's Kelly's poem, not Slush's poem! My apologies to you both for that last comment on the Anointing thread.

Things I particularly like about this piece:

"On fire from the steel-sharp
Glint of the sun"
I love this image. Hot. Sharp. Blinding.

"Tendrils, tree branches
Fanning unfurled limbs"
This one taps right into my love of green, growing things. I like the soundplay as well as the image here, too. They fit together well.

Noctilucent!!!!
I had to look this one up and will be unabashedly filtching it in the future!! Great word.

"A nautilus curl
Kissing your nape"
Lovely. Endearing. Delicate. Elegant.

Kelly, what kind of comments/suggestions do you find most helpful?

Thanks for reading and posting, Slush and Lucinda

Lucinda, happy you got a new word out of it It was recently added to my vocab a couple of months ago at my monthly art history salon. Some 19th century paintings by William Ascroft (UK) depicting the Chelsea sky after the eruption of Kralatoa in 1883 had these unbelievable titles using this word - we all loved it! And I swear I'm trying to weasel in 'crepuscular' into something as well

Regarding what comments/suggestions I find most helpful - well, I really have no idea! I mean the very fact that someone takes the time to read what I wrote and say anything about it is an asset. When you state what struck you most in my poem, it's incredibly rewarding to see how my images, thoughts, etc. caused a reaction in someone else - at times entirely different than what I was thinking or feeling at the time I wrote it. I guess just reading what someone took from my work (both good and bad) keeps pushing me forward. Thank you again for your sweet comments. I hope you post more work as well