I'm still new enough to be reluctant to seem "forward" by posting too much. At the same time, I'm often tempted to feel guilty for not contributing enough, either, so maybe posting a poem mightl be a way to begin paying off my FPN debt of gratitude.


Anointing

When the heart
is full the slightest
breath of birdsong
quivering on morning’s
level edge will break
its brimming, spill
liquescent cries
in rivulets along
the line of nearing
light, leave
sound and silvered
drops like grace
on each bowed
stem long after it
is emptied, rises
washed and luminous
a meadowlark
before the sun,
a winged and feathered cup
new-trembling, trilling
full and running over.

Thank you for that Lucinda. I will carry the imagery of brimming and rivulets with me throughout my day today. Come on in and don't hesitate to post anything. Thankfully, the bar is low here at FPN so even a dabbler like me can get in the action.

I loved that poem. Thanks Lucinda.

Thank you, Lucinda, for sharing this.

as with "nmb" - i found the lines below imagery especially clear and touching. But of course, the entire piece, which shouldn't be partitioned as I've done, is one lovely expression of a moment in time.

Contribute more, please! This was lovely to read, especially aloud - you do love the word play and sounds and excel at the implementation. As KCat said 'a lovely expression of a moment in time' - a gorgeous snapshot. 'slivered drops like grace'...*sigh* Thank you for sharing this with us - made my day.

Just to add my comments to what has been said by others, and with which I wholeheartedly agree, I'd like to say that your ending feels very fulfilling, full of promise of the bliss we are all looking for:

Just perfect.

Thank you for sharing that, Lucinda. I know how difficult that can be.

Warmest regards, Wim

Thank you for your affirmations and letting me know how the poem struck you all. This is the first time I've been online for a few days, and I apologise for not getting back to you all sooner. Life sometimes...happens. Your kind comments are most appreciated.

Now...I see that Slush99 has got a poem up that I'm anxious to take a peek at. You know, I've poked around on the Web for a few years and have seen a lot of message boards for writers that are less helpful and aware than this little "side forum" is.

Maybe people who write poetry with fountain pens are just smarter.

Though I do write poetry... it isn't as good as that. It's rather crappy... LOL

Maybe later...

It would be so nice if you included your thoughts here Slush:
How can anything that comes from your heart not be perfect?

hmmm... now that is something to think about...

Wow! Beautiful poem and imagery!!! Lucinda, I hope you don't mind, but I would like to add your poem to my journal (full attribution to you!).

Paul

Paul, you're most welcome to do that. I'm flattered and touched that you asked. Thank you.

Fabulous. Get a pen out and write